100 wc Elena

All I saw were two red eyes on the foot of my bed. I scream and pull my feet away. The eyes move even closer! It touched me, I scream so loud. I didn’t look up I was so, so scared so jumped out of bed. I tried to pull the door open but the door was locked and jammed like this was planned. My parents were laughing on the outside of my door. I turned around to see my brother and his new red glowing eyes in relief I sighed this was just a prank. Then to see him laughing.

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4 Responses to 100 wc Elena

  1. Mimi says:

    Great Story, i love the way you used the stimulus “all i saw were 2 red eyes and”

  2. Samar5 says:

    Hello Elena, your story was very frightening ,but next time use more words that stand out from your writing. e.g: I scream like a hyena, and pull my feet away.

    When I said ‘ like a hyena’ It is a similie so try to use similies too! It was a distinctive story anyway.

  3. Mrs Stones (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi Elena,
    Thank you very much for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week, I really enjoyed reading your work, even though it scared me quite a lot to begin with!
    You have used some great vocabulary in your writing which makes it more powerful.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs Stones

  4. abby says:

    great story really scary at the start and then it was good at the end.
    i hope that did’nt really happen.
    i hope to read more soon bye.
    p.s. thank you for letting me read your story

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